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[JogaBonito1502]

You should write this in the form of a Shakespearean or Italian sonnet. That'd be cool.

edit: I forgot the feedback! The rhymes are good, I think the meter is slightly inconsistent though.

 

[hemp]

Ya it doesn't really flow but it works for it's purpose

 

[hemp]

Edit:

So I read the poem and later found out that out of 100 students I was the only person to have written their own haha. Everyone want and got some Shel Silverstein poem so they didn't have do to any extra work.